Three years ago, I had just started my work in the Real Estate area, and I had to develop a construction project in an available urban site in the city of Viña del Mar. At that time, the building project alternatives for this site were varied, so I talked about with managers of four companies that they had good experience in this city, and I invited them to participate in the development, considering that I will choose the project that I find most interesting. As a first approach I asked them to show me some project ideas they would have for this site.
During the two weeks after my request, I received the information with suggestions on what they considered appropriate for the site, and curiously all four companies offered me the construction of three 15 floors buildings. I thought ,the propositions are perhaps neither the best nor the worst , but acceptable.
After that, I decided to choose the partner based on the design and the lower costs offered, so I sent them an email requesting the information. While I was sending the emails to this companies , I included erroneously an address of another Real Estate Company, which replied me very quickly and they told me they were happy for the message, and this company sent me a new idea of the project, which involved the construction of two 25 floors buildings , with the same total housing density and more extensive surface areas between buildings.
I was impressed, and finally, due to the wrong email input ,I chose this company as the partner to develop the project. Fortunately, with great sales success.
Hi Charles, how are you?
ReplyDeleteThank you for your post.
There are some problems with sentence formulation, though, that are important to mention.
For example, you say, " so I talked about with managers of four companies that they had good experience in this city"
As you mentioned the word "companies", you don´t need "they".
In this other sentence, "and I invited them to participate in the development, considering that I will choose the project that I find most interesting"
As you are refering to something that happened in the past, you have to continue in the past, so... say "CONSIDERING I WAS GOING TO CHOOSE THE PROJECT I FOUND MOST INTERESTING."
The some happens when you say, "I asked them to show me some projects they would have...".
I would have said, "I asked them to show me some projects they had,,,"
I would also say, "proposals" not "propositions" (Check Webster´s dictionary on line).
Finally, say, 25 floor-building (floor)in singular because it functions as an adjective and adjectives don´t take "s" in English.
Best wishes and remember, "Practice makes perfect"
See you.
Paula